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the funny thing about
humans is that
we think we are
invincible and immortal
gods.

no—
we're all
roadkill,
living in
a tainted world
where cars drive
too damn fast.

and me,
well,
i just try to
get by without
being hit
more than once.
I gave myself the challenge of only writing stanzas comprised of 15 words each. This was the outcome. I quite like it, though it's a bit cynical. Oh well. 

Titles are hard.

Sometimes harder than writing the actual poem.
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Bohax Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Just a BIT cynical :) but that is what makes it so powerful.
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AthenaLovesHippies Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2014
So true
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Cevelr Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love the way you title your poems. :heart:

Very interesting restriction you put on yourself!
This was very... thought-provoking... *-*

By the way, I like your new avatar~ c:
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Chamjari Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
When I was about five I saw a huge buzzard eat the eye of a deer that had been killed by a car. I don't think I have ever felt invincible.
It's not cynical to except eventual death. My mother, older sister, and I have often talked about the redistribution of wealth depending on who dies when, even laughing about it.
There was some comedian who said at some point in aging his life switched from an action/comedy movie to a Russian novel.  That's pretty cynical, true or not.
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snowkat-34 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I always love your work and all the feelings that accompany it :heart:
I really love your icon, by the way :3
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CowgirlJessy Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Student General Artist
Very interesting theme. Very thought-provoking. And the 15 words per stanza, although they don't have a common meter, somehow carries your eye and internal [reading] voice all the way through to the end.
Short and sweet--I like it :)
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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CowgirlJessy Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Student General Artist
No problem :D
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
LOVE. And oh my I feel you about writing titles. I struggle so much sometimes. Stay rad sunshine! :)
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
someone needs to make a title generator where you input the poem and it spits out a witty title
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