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it's ironic,
isn't it? the way
they say "hunger gnaws"
like the way our teeth
scrape against bones.

for all the
calories that are counted,
you still feel
empty. you aren't
beautiful until
you are digesting
nothing but air
and maybe your own guilt.

that's just the way
living is these
days: swallowing
glass shards to
slice up your insides so
you can ignore
the other kind of pain your
stomach is feeling.

but when people ask
if you're doing okay you just
smile and nod even though
you can't help but
think "if honesty was
tangible, i'd eat it right
now."

life has
an acquired taste and
some days you'd
like to rip your
tongue out.
a collection of messy thoughts 
while staring at my dinner plate.
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haphazardmelody Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I feel this. :heart:
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DearPoetry Jan 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love you. I love you. I love you.
Please remember that!
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delirious-eyes Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this is real poetry. raw and gripping; and nonetheless with a subject that is so difficult to portray originally.
just, wow. 
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shehrozeameen Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like the way you've portrayed food in contrast to the notions of diet and physical portrayal that one has. Its a good food for thought literally and pun intended. What I appreciate about it is the second last stanza - I know that feeling, but wasn't able to put it in words.

You were spot on there. Well done. Really! :) This is a well done work. I like how you've captured the (ate) part in the word satiated - giving it a double meaning. Well done :)
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pepper131361 Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
<3
absolutely adore this..
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IcyKitsuneStorm Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love it! :) The pessimism! :)
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:iconxvll-thestar:
I have to start by saying that this poem is damn amazing.
I love reading poetry with great imagery and perfect metaphors.

This is inspiring to me, actually, because I've been on the other side of it. Some people starve themselves because they feel like that's what the world expects of them (or whatever their reasons may be) and some people are starving just because they're struggling through life.

Thank you, for this. I wasn't able to properly convey my feelings on the first half of my life, but now I feel inspired and more confident that I may do so.
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PrussianPersephone Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. Your words mean a lot to me. <3 I'm glad I inspired you even though this is kind of a very depressing piece.
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:iconxvll-thestar:
I tend to be kind of a very depressing person at times. :P

Well, it seems like I write more from experiencing sorrow than I am able to from joy. I suppose that's how it is for any artist?
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chancerox Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"if honesty was
tangible, i'd eat it right
now."

--
my goodness. :Heart: 
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