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i'd like to smear ashes
over bloody heathen lips
and twist burnt corsages
around the maypole.

this rotten witch's heart
would love to curse you all.

disease has never looked so
lovely, i do declare, crawling
up your blistering limbs.

in case you are not aware—
love kills slowly, but revenge tastes so sweet,
so i'll just tip-toe off of this cliff
and embrace the beast awaiting for me below.

phoenix rising,
sunlight fading;

we
    all
         fall
              down.
You know what they say.

"Ashes to ashes, dust to dust."

No, I'm not really okay at the moment, so just let me vent via freeverse and everything will be fine.
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Your poem is so savage in a really satisfying way. Somehow I feel like it speaks a truth, one that we generally do not like, but we do understand it is a truth.
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Hanachi-Shitsukki Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is delicious, amazing, and strangely satisfying. Knowing revenge is wrong. Knowing the cliff is near. Knowing what waits below...
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
"love kills slowly, but revenge tastes so sweet," I adore that. And please, vent all you need. All my poems are cleverly disguised passive aggressive rants.
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autumn--thunder Mar 26, 2013  Student General Artist
This reminds me somewhat of that nursery rhyme - you know, the one that goes: 'Ring around the rosy, a pocket full of posy...' Especially with the last line, and the mention of disease. Wonderful poem.
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PrussianPersephone Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That was the point.

Thanks.
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autumn--thunder Mar 27, 2013  Student General Artist
Ah, I see. I didn't see that many other people had commented on it, so I wasn't sure.

No problem.
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KrystalMist Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I must say I like the word play and this emotion is quite powerful I only wish there was more
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PrussianPersephone Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can guarantee I have similar pieces since it seems like I'm always venting my emotions out on here.
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AntagonisticSpazz Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The imagery is excellent and I feel that you have captured a very raw emotion very well. The use of fire was superb. Great job.
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PrussianPersephone Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. As cliche as it sounds, fire imagery always helps me when I'm incredibly upset.
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