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What is a heartbeat,
without the heart?
What is a dream,
without the conscience?
What is a word,
without the letters?
What is a hope,
without the faith?
What is a soul,
without the self?
What is a kiss,
without the love?

What am I,
without you?
Trying for a different style. Basically, I'm bored to death in class at the moment, and this came to me. So I wrote it. Not that I have any experience in the romance department in real life--I've never been kissed, never been crushed on that I know of, never had a crush other than fictional characters, and never had a boyfriend.

I just wonder what the world would be like without this thing they call "love," I suppose.

Go me and my sappy attempts at being a romantic.

This thing sucks. I can't write poetry. Bleh. :|
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LupiniunStar Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013
This is a good romance poem, I think! You did very good, especially since you've never had a relationship. I enjoyed it, and yep, it was sappy!

And yes you can write poetry, and I love it all!
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yellowfire7 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I've been going through your deviations, and all of them are excellent. I can't vouch for your Hetalia fics because I don't read Hetalia fics but you might force me to start. Ending up on this one by complete coincidence, I have to applaud you on so many well-written collections of words. No matter which one I went to, they all felt like they had substance, something alive behind the page. This one, specifically: oh, those first two lines and I was hooked. They're simple phrases, simple questions, but they bring up so many emotions and questions of a greater truth and they do it just right.

Thank you for the experience. It was wonderful.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't blame you, Hetalia can be terrifying for some people. It's fine.

And, well...I really can't believe the depth of this comment. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this piece, and your words mean a lot.
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inkwolfokaim Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
This is amazing for someone who has never had a relationship. I have been in a couple before. This... Is just...Wow!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thanks, then...I'm just a strange one.
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inkwolfokaim Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
No you're not! You're an amazing writer!
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TitoRoxas-CotoUchiha Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I also wonder what world would be like without love... But you have alot of potencial at romanticism. It doesn't sucks... In fact, it's very good, you CAN write poetry. "Not anybody can be an artist, but an artist can come from anywhere."
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much then; your words mean quite a lot.
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TitoRoxas-CotoUchiha Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome.
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TitoRoxas-CotoUchiha Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry if is hard to understand, I've alot without speaking in english TwT
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