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I wanted to see what makes a human heart
beat,
so I took a scimitar and ripped apart your decrepit
flesh,
and inside that primordial ribcage I found nothing but
corruption.

And you merely gave a cruel parody of a
smile,
dug your bloodstained claws into your
chest,
and tore out that infestation you called a
soul.

"Analyze that well, my little necromancer," you
sneered,
fangs dripping with the acid I once begged to
taste,
"Perhaps you'll be as wise as me once you find the
pulse."

I could only watch as you sunk back down into
Hell,
clutching that contaminated Philosopher's Stone
hazardously,
knowing you had replaced my heart with the poison known as
'l o v e.'
Who said all Valentine's Day poems had to be romantic and sappy?

Just my contribution to what is possibly the worst holiday ever. An attempt at horror, somewhat, while playing around with some personal opinions on romance. Because believe me, I've yet to have delved into that lovely sea. Still a lone fishy over here.

Edit: I was wondering why I was getting so many faves on this...it made the front page. Thanks. But again...I don't understand why, this one wasn't very good. :| Oh well.
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner May 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I will be a lonely fishy too, then... I honestly hope that you find the love you're looking for. I do. And this is such an awesome twist in writing for a Valentine's Day poem! I prefer this to the sappy ones :3
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Hetalia-Spain Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
((Valentine's Day... I get mixed feelings about that day. I don't believe that people only have that one day just to do something romantic for their loved ones. What's stopping them from getting them roses/chocolates/etc. for that special person? The fact that this holiday is for romantic purposes?

I'll never understand it... But I really like this poem. Also... Prepared to be spammed. By me. Commenting. And faving. :la:))
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TaylorElizabethYoung Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Professional Writer
I like this a lot! I'd like to feature it in my new group #Paranormal-Artists :)
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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TaylorElizabethYoung Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Professional Writer
you're welcome!
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hi there, awesome person! :hi:

I used your artwork title as a line for my poem! : )

Hope you won't mind! ^^

Have a nice day! :huggle:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's perfectly fine! :)
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh, lovely. <3
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ehe, thanks.
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure.
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dreamingoflight Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student Writer
Do you submit your poems to all these groups? cos I'm trying to get some of my poems out to a bigger audience.

btw, I love your non-traditional view of this holiday. very poe-esque poem :highfive:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I submit them to a lot of lit groups, and I'm always looking for more to join. I think it's a good way to get your work out there. Try some of these; I'm sure you'll gain a few more fans!

Anyway, thank you very much. I guess I can be like Poe to some degree...but not as amazing as him.
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dreamingoflight Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student Writer
it's just if i join a lot of groups I forget which ones i'm in, especially if they have limited submissions. and it would take a lot of time i think to submit to each one.
do you think that the smaller groups get you more attention?
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sarpndo Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
Excellent poem. Very good way to look at it.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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sarpndo Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
you're welcome.
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unde2aker Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
interesting and valentines day is terrible
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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TaliaNekoInuAlexis Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
i love it
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to hear so!
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TaliaNekoInuAlexis Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
welcome <3
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Aryashadeslayer Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
I hate sappy and romantic Valentine's day poems. This was very beautiful and twisted, just the way I like it haha ;) I find love a twisted sick thing, I'm too cynical about it. I'm not interested in relationships anyways of the few guys I've ever liked, they turned out to be huge jerks. :P
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Me too, haha. Thank you very much! Cynicism at times is the best way to go, I think. Depends on what it is.
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Aryashadeslayer Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
So true, your poem also gave me great ideas to write about :) I plan on showing this poem to my friend if you don't mind?
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sure, go ahead!
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student Writer
Damn, this is good. A really interesting twist on a Valentine's love poem (I must say I agree that Valentine's Day is a silly, commercialized holiday).

:D
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.

And I'm glad I'm not the only one with the same feelings, aha.
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0-EmoLeopard-0 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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Synaesthetic1 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013
Heh, not so lone in your sea eh? I like the counter-course to your poem. Valentine's day is wasted, overinterpreted from corrupt lore.

And as for romance, like any decent alchemy, you experiment obsessively, each time refining the process whether it fizzles out or blows up in your face. Or until you get it right. A true Stone. Or something like it. Ever elusive, yet so plain.
Necromans away. Let me know if you find anything interesting. :D Itadakimasu!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No, I'm still alone, because...I'm talking about not having a relationship myself.

Anyway, thank you very much.
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Synaesthetic1 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
I figured as much- I am saying you are not alone in being alone.
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Asdfghjkl why can't people see that this is really what happens?

Tomorrow, I shall go to the local shops and become drunk on chocolate.

And Singles' Awareness Day is also tomorrow! :dummy: That's what my small circle of single friends call it.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Because people are dumb. :|

I call it that as well.
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kayceethe166 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
awesome. id say more, but awesome pretty much sums it up. cheers!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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LizKartland Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Best Valentine's Day poem. EVER.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thanks.
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sherlock-status Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Student Writer
"Love is patient, love is kind. Love means slowly losing your mind." - That One Guy In That One Chick Flick.


I LIVE by this quote. I've never been in love, but I've had several crushes. Needless to say, they didn't turn out well.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thing is, practically every guy I've been around is either a man whore or a complete douche bag. Save for a couple exceptions. I only have my fictional character crushes to pine away on.
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sherlock-status Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Student Writer
My first boyfriend was gay. He used me to hide the fact that he liked a guy and I was too desperate to see it. You're lucky to have met the couple of exceptions because so far I haven't run into any. As for the fictional characters, who wouldn't want to date one of them? They're perfect!!!
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Student Writer
Well St. Valentine used to marry Roman soldiers to native women in Britannica secretly on this day a very long time ago...it's too bad it's been commercialized like everything else. Very cool historical roots.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the history behind it. I just hate it today because of what it's become. And I feel so damn lonely and depressed on this day.
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student Writer
I understand that completely, the depression at least.
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starell Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013
Love it! Really interesting structure as well!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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starell Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
You are most welcome!
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Misery007 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is pure beauty! I'm not a big fan of valentines day, I'm not really interested in relationships right now, and all these people kissing is kinda... Ugh...
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I second this statement.

Yeah, I like writing romance (not as much as I used to) but real life relationships are just no.
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