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She has suns for eyes,
and oceans for tears,
a blade of grass for each hair,
and wisdom beyond her years.

Rage like an earthquake,
sorrow as deep as the sea,
madness funneled like a hurricane,
joy blooming so vividly, kings fall to their knee.

Her skin is a motley,
with hues so dark and bright,
she sleeps during the day,
and lays awake at night.

She has the universe for a heart,
and the cosmos burn in her soul,
however, humanity's blindness,
is at last taking its toll.
I just took my LA honors semester final and bombed the hell out of it because the teacher never gave our class the extensive study guides she did the others, so...

Here's the poem I had to write for the last bit of the final. Basically, the test was over a shit ton of stuff, the last sections being Poe, Whitman, and Dickinson. We had to write a poem that emulated the styles of one of those three poets.

I tried doing Poe with the internal rhyme, but I obviously failed. I can't be all sophisticated with my poems. Bleh.

Anyway. A tribute to the earth. It's bad. But hey, I only had ten minutes to do it. So I'm not complaining.

Also, "Mother Earth" by Within Temptation is an amazing song.
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CordeliaMoon Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014
This is beautiful! ^^ I really like the comparisons
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Jmylimerence Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Urgh, I enjoyed this so much. It greatly describes. 
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itsbumblebee Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing
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LupiniunStar Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013
This is a great poem about Mother Earth! I really like all the metaphors you put in the first paragraph, and then all the similes later on! You're so good at poems to do this in ten minutes.
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BlacK-Kat9 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh Mother Earth and her similies~ <3
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, yep!
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CardinalDesertFox Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the imagery of Mother Earth here. It's evocative and colorful. This poem really brings to mind all the images you mention, and I love that. It's more of a visual experience than it is a poem, really. I really liked it!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ahhhh, thank you so much.
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CardinalDesertFox Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course! You're welcome! ^^
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findmyface Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Dude one of your best I love the second, and last few lines, really good.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; but one of my best? I don't think so...
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findmyface Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well to me it speaks to my heart louder than the rest.
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Dayum. That's awesome!
And as for the teacher never giving your class the study guides, even though she gave them to the others...?
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!

She gave us study guides, but with our class, she never went over them extensively as she did the other classes. Plus, we got them a day late. :|
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow...:o
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GodBlessTheDucks Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey, you did better than I ever would. I suck at poetry, and you're amazing. Compared to me, at least. I doubt you could beat Poe XD
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No one can beat Poe at this shit.
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GodBlessTheDucks Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Except for Poe.
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student Writer
This is pretty damn incredible for something done in so short an amount of time. Seriously. If it were me there'd likely be nothing there. XD

And your word choice is just lovely.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aha, thanks, but I really don't like it. Especially if I was trying for Poe's style. :|
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student Writer
No problem.

There's always the saying that we're our own worst enemy. I guess that's what happens. Don't be too critical on yourself.
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Allthecoolnamesrgone Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I think this is rather nice... If you didn't do well on it I will rush to save you.... It's also very decent for 10 minutes, and you did some Poe stuff with the ending because it sounded pretty ominous and dark. I think also you had a little bit of underlying meaning and internal rhyme, but not much...
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks much!
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Piezelle Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist
I'm scared now. The last two lines of the poem is making me feel guilty and sad and scared all at once. ^^;
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Feeeeeeeel the guuuuuuiiiiiiiiilt.

*Not a major tree hugger, but I do feel some contempt for the state we have put the earth in*
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Piezelle Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist
:iconcryforeverplz: yup
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imagination-junkie Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
I don't know much about poetry styles, but I liked this. It gave me environmentalist feels. And I hope you did ok on your test! :)
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aha, thanks...I really hope I did fine. My entire class was extremely pissed.

The bitch wasn't even there for the final so we could ask questions; she was at a doctor's appointment. :|
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imagination-junkie Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
Yea it sounds like it really sucked :(

And that...That is just NOT ok. :iconwthplz:
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UnluckyNumberXIII Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Dunno, it seems pretty good to me... :)
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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UnluckyNumberXIII Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome. I enjoy your work. :)
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