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Build me a sandcastle on the edge of the sea,
where the cliffs are sprayed with the salty tears of the tide,
and sirens cry into the night for the arms of a lover
to whisk them away into a dry night free of brine;
Where we shall dance the sunset's furtive sigh of redemption
on the edge of saline bluffs, and kiss with the gunpowder
of forgotten cannons high on the waves of an abandoned ocean;
Teetering the edge of the world, where the Kraken and Leviathan lay in wait
for lost-lorn victims of broken hearts and brackish undertows
coursing through their veins.

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Just a random thing that popped into my head that I knew if I didn't write down immediately, it would be gone.

It's funny, because normally when my mind comes up with these spur-of-the-moment poems, I have no idea what they mean.

This time, I know exactly what I'm talking about. I'm not telling anyone else that, however.

Do you think I play around with format too much? I'm sorry. It really is interesting to see what I can come up with.
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013   Writer
I love this poem's imagery and structure gr8 job!
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa. That poem.

Is so beautifully layered I would cry each time I unwrapped it.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
But it's not meant to be sad, really.
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Interpretation. God. So much interpretation to do now.

Love it! And the formats are great. I don't know how to do it, but, eh, I like how you use them!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Have fun.

Thank you.
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Student Writer
This is purely amazing. My mind has once more been inundated with interpretations. D':

whoa there I don't want to drown I have fanfics to write
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Inundación means flood in Spanish. Just a little fun fact.

You're not the one who's meant to drown D:
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Student Writer
Ohoho. That's interesting.

Then who is? D:
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forxa Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
The last three words scared me a bit.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Poetry is meant to be unpredictable.
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