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    When she cries herself to sleep
    six out of seven nights a week you must
    say nothing. You must simply take
    her in your arms and kiss her gaunt,
    pale cheeks and wait for her to
    slumber at the sound of your heart.

two.

    On the days where she wishes she
    were part of the stars, tell her
    no. Tell her that there are too many
    lights in the sky and that just one
    would be forgotten the moment you looked
    away from it. Tell her that she is perfect
    the way she is: completely human.

three.

     Don't let her think about the scars
     that no one but her can see. If she
     says "I think I'm broken" smile like you
     know a secret and say, "No, you're mending."
     But do not be the one to fix her - no, she
     must be the one to do it herself, and you
     merely are there to quietly encourage her.

four.

     Read her poetry (even if you are
     not a poet), the kind that uses
     flowery words and compares girls to
     the moon; the kind that you will
     rewrite for her. Make her a warrior.
     Make her a goddess with eyes like a
     wolf's and a smile like a tiger's.

five.

     Laugh with her the first thing in
     the morning and the last thing before
     you fall asleep. Tell her cheap puns
     that you've been thinking of for weeks.
     And when she smiles - the type of smile
     that could bring you to your knees if
     you aren't careful - know that for the
     moment, she's yours. She is whole.

six.

    Love her. Love her like a fish loves
    the sea or a bird loves the sky. Love
    her in the way that your heart feels like
    it's going to burst at any moment every
    time it beats. Love her skin and the way
    it feels against your own, soft and warm
    and utterly flawless. Love her for the way
    her voice trembles when she can't keep it
    together anymore and love her when she
    holds onto you as if you were the only
    thing that was keeping her alive.

seven.

     Love her, because some days she just can't do it herself.
   
     

     
     
   
Edit four: PLEASE FUCKING READ THIS BEFORE COMMENTING. I really didn't want this to get as popular as it did. People don't understand the meaning behind it. This is not about romance, people. This is not solely about a man comforting a woman. This is about love. Family love, friends loving each other, and yes, lovers--but for me, this was written about family. I want my family to be there for me. Maybe the way I wrote this came off too much as lovey-dovey but it's not meant to be that way. I am female and therefore I wrote it from that perspective. If I was a guy I'd write it from that perspective. So stop getting your panties in a fucking twist and then getting into arguments with other people. I hate all the negativity in here. It makes me want to delete my work. I know this is the internet and that we can't be mature but come on--can we at least try?! I don't reply to all the comments but I do look at them and see the shit that goes down and it disappoints me highly. Also, I swear to god if I get one more creepy note from some weirdo about how they'll "take care of me" I am reporting you to dA. Not that it'll do anything. Just...please. Stop. Be mature. Be kind to others in the comments. Don't think that your opinion is the only one that matters because it's not. and always read the description because it will most likely answer any question you have about the meaning behind the poem. I'm sorry if this comes off as harsh and bitchy but I have had enough.

EDIT THREE: Oh shit why did this get a DD I didn't want this to be that popular it's not even that good I mean I'm flattered but oh fuck I don't deserve it.

EDIT TWO: AHHHHH OH MY GOD SuedeTruama READ IT OUT LOUD YOU CAN FIND IT HERE: 
soundcloud.com/rose-marie-85/h… I AM FREAKING OUT BECAUSE NO ONE HAS EVER READ MY POETRY OUT LOUD BEFORE AND I LOVE THIS I LOVE IT I LOVE IT SO MUUUUUUCH


EDIT: Front page?! Get this off it doesn't belong there.

I'm trying to be positive. 

I don't know if it'll work but I can still try.

(I wouldn't call this romantic because love doesn't always have to be.)

This is all I want someone to do for me but since it's not going to happen, I'll just have to do it myself and shake off those bad days like they're nothing but unwanted dirt.
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Given 2014-05-30
How to love a girl who can't love herself. by PrussianPersephone truly captures the simplicity of loving another, even when they refuse to love themselves.  Also suggested by ChinZaPep ( Suggested by Waffles-Of-Gondolyn and Featured by inknalcohol )
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F47P4W5 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2015  New member Hobbyist Digital Artist
You put me down to tears... Yooooooou areeeee amazing!
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PleaseImJustaGirl Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2015
 Still, So much better Now, a Miracle From darkness to Light. I Have Been Reborn.
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JadaWise Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2015
I am about to cry. You did such an awesome work. 
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ibanez0r Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2015
that is really beautiful, thank-you
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flowerslogan Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2015  Student Photographer
im sorry but i can intrupt this as both family but in a romantic since to. but all in all its really great and made me cry because i am a girl who cant love her self and so while reading this im like yes yes and yes
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yzel07 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2015
Beautiful!
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TopazMyst Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful <3
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Sakura-Yotobari Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful <3 
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musicbxgirl5 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2014  Student
Thank you.
Sometimes, I am not that girl. But most days, I am. And I wish that people would understand.
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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2014  Student General Artist
how i feel about my family <3 lovely poetry
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DeathNoteChick612 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful.  Thank you for sharing. :)
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PleaseImJustaGirl Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2014
 OH! Prussian I cried when I read this, this is what my Family is doing for me now and I actually forget to thank them. I'm so Wretched.
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SnowLeopard84 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2015
Forgetting isn't a bad thing; you're not wretched, 'cos when you realized it, you felt bad! Also, I'm glad your family is there for you, and I wish you good luck!
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TheFallingRiot Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
" But do not be the one to fix her - no, she must be the one to do it herself." It always hurts to hear such things but this calmed me as my eyes read on, " And you merely are there to quietly encourage her."
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Demonic-Fantasy Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2014  Student General Artist
Beautiful. 
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lucarloroq Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2014
Loved this poem, it really touched me. Made me remember of my best friend, who is fighting  against depression (just like me), i really love her, like the birds love the sky, but i just don't know what to do, and it makes me sick. 
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Mivzz Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014
It's simply amazing!
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Abeer-Kasiri Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
woww this brought tears :D awwwwwwww
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Henour Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2014
I'm sorry but its too good to avoid faving it :p
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rammstein-girl-97 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2014
Beautifully written, I hope your healing and have family to help you. I can relate to your feelings, my family and friends help me heal too, and I'm learning how to fix myself.

"EDIT THREE:" You're a really good writer, so truthful and beautiful don't doubt yourself. :) 
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blueskye13 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014
I'm sorry that someone has not done this for you as yet, hopefully they have by now or will soon. But this poem is beautiful and I know it will probably help lots of people who love someone who is depressed. Depression is so much more serious than people understand.

I particularly like the structure of your verses - the enjambment emphasises all the prettiest and most important words. It's really well done.
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bitteryetsweet Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014
You were trying to be positive in this? I can appreciate the effort. I'm up for fresh, new perspectives towards the things we've already known to enlighten myself, and it's kind of rewarding. And it's applicable, so there's a bonus.

All of that said, I wish you clarified the meaning of this whole deviation first thing before posting it. And you getting a Daily Deviation because of this isn't about you deserving it; everyone else here appreciates your effort to be positive too. I just wanted to let you know that, and we're very grateful to have you here.

We hope to see you soon!Hi! 
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"Don't let her think about the scars
     that no one but her can see. If she 
     says "I think I'm broken" smile like you
     know a secret and say, "No, you're mending."
     But do not be the one to fix her - no, she
     must be the one to do it herself, and you
     merely are there to quietly encourage her."

Amen...   No one should "fix" anyone. But It's also not "your" job to better yourself - "yourself" That's God's job. and Until you submit to Him through His Son, you are just living a life of hopeless dreams that will never happen.

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Read her poetry (even if you are
     not a poet), the kind that uses
     flowery words and compares girls to
     the moon; the kind that you will
     rewrite for her. Make her a warrior.
     Make her a goddess with eyes like a
     wolf's and a smile like a tiger's."

Again...   If you want someone to "worship" you, and you believe you may find them one day, you are simply putting yourself in a bad triangulation dynamic where you are looking for a "rescuer" Bad Guy seeks Victim seeks Rescuer seeks Bad Guy....  If you want to live a life that's worth something and understand what "Love" is you need to understand the Root of where it comes from and who designed it. Not to mention understand that if you place anything on an equal or higher tier than the Love you have for your Creator, you are doomed to fail in your relationships.

Every Time.

Read Danny Silk's "Keep Your Love On" and you will understand the nature of what I speak and WHY Jesus loves you more.....

More than anyone in your life.

and when you come to understand this, you will find someone who is the same. :)
and you will be at peace. 
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vonsilvo Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
Such beauty, such truth.
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AintGotNoLegs Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
There are too many of us women having too many bad days. We were born with a sadness inside us that never goes away. What you wrote is beautiful, touching, and relatable. Thank you for it. It is something that not only I, but anyone else who needs it, can read and know they aren't alone. 
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Nightshade-Galaxy Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
LOLOLOL I'm sorry I loved this I was sitting here, like that was beautiful.

And then I saw the description and you like killed the mood. That was hilarious,  "Oh shit why did this get a DD I didn't want this to be that popular it's not even that good I mean I'm flattered but oh fuck I don't deserve it." This was one of my favorite parts "
EDIT: Front page?! Get this off it doesn't belong there." This was the second one- I can't stop laughing at the reaction.

Beautiful poem, and I hope things are better off in the comments for you don't deserve that :aww:
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NoLoveAvailable Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014
I started crying at number two. If there was an unlimited amount of how many times you could fav it, I would do it 100 times everyday for the rest of my life
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pychoclown Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I have struggled with loving myself for an incredibly long time, and have a really hard time expressing that to people who don't know it very well. 

I cried when I read this for the first time, and quite frankly still get a little weepy re-reading it. 

I was having a really bad day once, and I couldn't really explain it to my best friend very well, so I made him read this. . .it described what I wanted to say perfectly.

In love with this even if you didn't want it to be as popular as it is.
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CatherinEclipse Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
very inspirational Heart 
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IvanRadev Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Professional General Artist
The poem is really good, congrats on the DD! It is beautiful and sad, but life is like that too. Nevertheless, I must confessed I like your "edit four" more, true romance shouldn't be that much different from the way we love our family or the world. It should be in the way we live and hopefully everyone gets something as sweet and nice as what you described in your poem! 


And keep going.
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LaughingFrogArt Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful.
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hiddendelights Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014
This is beautiful, and I just want you to know that you are wonderful, and if you ever need anyone to be there for you, my inbox is open. :heart:
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Maneki-Neko44 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014   General Artist
👏 This is powerful.
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wulfzplay Featured By Owner May 31, 2014
Love 
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Whooboy Featured By Owner May 31, 2014
Wow, good job, it's REALLY quite good. =D
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PandaNotes Featured By Owner May 31, 2014
This was honestly so beautiful! Happy Cry - Smiley Truly wonderful work with this!
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Hinata0321 Featured By Owner May 31, 2014
That's beautiful! I'm so glad I saw this, so glad I clicked on this, so glad I read this - you might not believe it's worth it, but I'm very glad this is where where people can see it. This really made me smile. I feel like people miss the point so often, with their visions of what love is. It doesn't need to be explicitly romantic, it doesn't need to be sexual, it doesn't need to be perfect - it's just human companionship and love, and love worth dreaming for :')
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libelle Featured By Owner May 31, 2014   General Artist

This is beautifully written and I like your style.

I ask myself, who can really meet these demands.

This must be superman/superwoman. I'm glad, we are all human.

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setophis37 Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
I lived through this a while ago....Now she's my wife and we have a little boy who is our pride and joy . when I read this I feel so many things in my soul and guts.... Just beautifull Bravo....Waaaah! Wink/Razz 
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Son-of-Icarus Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Fuck. . . I want a girl to love me like this.
Beautiful piece.
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Marla-chan Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
this is so absolutely true and a perfect description of how best to care for someone who is hurting. i knew a man who understood that but i lost him in the worst way possible a few years ago. i dont have anyone to treat me like this now but i still have myself. you and me, honey, were gonna be okay. :hug:
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Rinic-the-Fox Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I would normally not favorite things.. but fuck it, I got reminded of my beloved, so I just honestly actually faved for once in my life~

You honestly deserve the DD, I just.. I just really found how relatable this can be..~ It feels like this was written-

Holy shit i'm still talking about my feels oh jeez i'm sorry XD But ugh, I love this that's all I gotta say~ Kay for realz I has finished le speaking~ XD
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DancingInTwilight Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student General Artist
love, my bf has struggled with me and my untreated depression. we are doing much better now 3 years later. I sent this to him :heart:  this feels like our story
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french-iris Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
This.  This right here is love.
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flamian Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
This. This right here is a thing of pure beauty. You may think that this is unworthy. That it's not that good. But you are wrong. This came straight from your heart. And that is far more important than anything else. Because when something comes from the very heart of a person, that message goes on and touches the hearts of others. It stirs others hearts, tugs at them, and ultimately may help them better themselves and others. This is perfect just the way it is, and no one else could have said it any better. I thank you for sharing this with us.
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simayanan Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
What can I add? I am not this girl now, but I might have been at some time in the past. I have posted it on my FB TimeLine. I have no idea what my friends will say, if anything. They are more used to my posting stuff about how horrible India is.
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Brimseye Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
Grats for the DD.  I'm glad to have read this even if you didn't wish it to be well known.  :]
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BlackVinyl Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student Digital Artist
When I read this I had the false impression that every girl can relate to this and hope for a lover like the one described, but at the beginning where it says, "kiss her gaunt, pale cheeks" I immediately felt like this is some poem from a different time period. Then it became worst. It became cliche, nonsensical bullshit. I guess there is somewhat of a warning because the narrator is telling these lover boys to be cheesy, mushy, and emotional with these fragile creatures.

The commentary says, "...captures simplicity of loving another" there's nothing simple about this, unless the lover is committed to the girl beyond her beauty and beyond the brokenness and it's simple for him. I feel like this poem had a sense of vanity to it with a hint of that famous old Disney Princess helplessness(with Disney credit however is slowly transforming from a helpless pretty girl, to a strong, young woman who can fend for herself).

Everyone has their own opinion about how men should treat women who are like this. Women who have lived difficult lives and tread on hurtful memories that are hard to surpass. The poet says they wouldn't call it romantic, but the lover described would have to be into some kind of romanticism to hopefully repair the wounds of his beloved girl.

I really think the emotions here are strong, and that there is a lot to say about what kind of man this lover would have to be. I just feel that it wasn't executed effectively enough to show how strong he has to be, it just shows how mushy, doting and emotional he must to be. The strength doesn't have to be rough enough for the lover to always have to defend his girl to other outside entities, there should be a quiet understanding that they both have. If he loves her so much the struggle should be shared, but that means he has to understand her struggle, she has to be open with him about everything. Who's to say she's not? - but this poem makes the lover so distant. The mending part of the poem explains this, but it also implies that she can't share everything until she's healed. I think this is the problem with women like this if you want to heal and you love the man you're with you need to get the weight off of your chest. Then comes into question trust, shame, embarrassment. If she tells her these scars will he change? A lot of emotion and mystery here. I just hated the cheesy mushyness, the Captain Save-A-Ho mentality here, and dated qualities of this poem.
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Ipoxitye Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i find this amazing because i am that girl.

i've been experiencing severe depression and anxiety for two months now, i don't have a boyfriend (and frankly i doubt i will anytime soon) but my best friends and my parents treat me exactly like this. every time i feel like pulling the trigger, they're always right there, loving me even though i hate myself.

you probably won't read this comment, but i loved this poem more than words can describe. you deserve a watch just for this. :heart:
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