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one.

    When she cries herself to sleep
    six out of seven nights a week you must
    say nothing. You must simply take
    her in your arms and kiss her gaunt,
    pale cheeks and wait for her to
    slumber at the sound of your heart.

two.

    On the days where she wishes she
    were part of the stars, tell her
    no. Tell her that there are too many
    lights in the sky and that just one
    would be forgotten the moment you looked
    away from it. Tell her that she is perfect
    the way she is: completely human.

three.

     Don't let her think about the scars
     that no one but her can see. If she
     says "I think I'm broken" smile like you
     know a secret and say, "No, you're mending."
     But do not be the one to fix her - no, she
     must be the one to do it herself, and you
     merely are there to quietly encourage her.

four.

     Read her poetry (even if you are
     not a poet), the kind that uses
     flowery words and compares girls to
     the moon; the kind that you will
     rewrite for her. Make her a warrior.
     Make her a goddess with eyes like a
     wolf's and a smile like a tiger's.

five.

     Laugh with her the first thing in
     the morning and the last thing before
     you fall asleep. Tell her cheap puns
     that you've been thinking of for weeks.
     And when she smiles - the type of smile
     that could bring you to your knees if
     you aren't careful - know that for the
     moment, she's yours. She is whole.

six.

    Love her. Love her like a fish loves
    the sea or a bird loves the sky. Love
    her in the way that your heart feels like
    it's going to burst at any moment every
    time it beats. Love her skin and the way
    it feels against your own, soft and warm
    and utterly flawless. Love her for the way
    her voice trembles when she can't keep it
    together anymore and love her when she
    holds onto you as if you were the only
    thing that was keeping her alive.

seven.

     Love her, because some days she just can't do it herself.
   
     

     
     
   
Edit four: PLEASE FUCKING READ THIS BEFORE COMMENTING. I really didn't want this to get as popular as it did. People don't understand the meaning behind it. This is not about romance, people. This is not solely about a man comforting a woman. This is about love. Family love, friends loving each other, and yes, lovers--but for me, this was written about family. I want my family to be there for me. Maybe the way I wrote this came off too much as lovey-dovey but it's not meant to be that way. I am female and therefore I wrote it from that perspective. If I was a guy I'd write it from that perspective. So stop getting your panties in a fucking twist and then getting into arguments with other people. I hate all the negativity in here. It makes me want to delete my work. I know this is the internet and that we can't be mature but come on--can we at least try?! I don't reply to all the comments but I do look at them and see the shit that goes down and it disappoints me highly. Also, I swear to god if I get one more creepy note from some weirdo about how they'll "take care of me" I am reporting you to dA. Not that it'll do anything. Just...please. Stop. Be mature. Be kind to others in the comments. Don't think that your opinion is the only one that matters because it's not. and always read the description because it will most likely answer any question you have about the meaning behind the poem. I'm sorry if this comes off as harsh and bitchy but I have had enough.

EDIT THREE: Oh shit why did this get a DD I didn't want this to be that popular it's not even that good I mean I'm flattered but oh fuck I don't deserve it.

EDIT TWO: AHHHHH OH MY GOD SuedeTruama READ IT OUT LOUD YOU CAN FIND IT HERE: 
soundcloud.com/rose-marie-85/h… I AM FREAKING OUT BECAUSE NO ONE HAS EVER READ MY POETRY OUT LOUD BEFORE AND I LOVE THIS I LOVE IT I LOVE IT SO MUUUUUUCH


EDIT: Front page?! Get this off it doesn't belong there.

I'm trying to be positive. 

I don't know if it'll work but I can still try.

(I wouldn't call this romantic because love doesn't always have to be.)

This is all I want someone to do for me but since it's not going to happen, I'll just have to do it myself and shake off those bad days like they're nothing but unwanted dirt.
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Given 2014-05-30
How to love a girl who can't love herself. by PrussianPersephone truly captures the simplicity of loving another, even when they refuse to love themselves.  Also suggested by ChinZaPep ( Suggested by Waffles-Of-Gondolyn and Featured by GrimFace242 )
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Henour Featured By Owner 2 days ago
I'm sorry but its too good to avoid faving it :p
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rammstein-girl-97 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2014
Beautifully written, I hope your healing and have family to help you. I can relate to your feelings, my family and friends help me heal too, and I'm learning how to fix myself.

"EDIT THREE:" You're a really good writer, so truthful and beautiful don't doubt yourself. :) 
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blueskye13 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014
I'm sorry that someone has not done this for you as yet, hopefully they have by now or will soon. But this poem is beautiful and I know it will probably help lots of people who love someone who is depressed. Depression is so much more serious than people understand.

I particularly like the structure of your verses - the enjambment emphasises all the prettiest and most important words. It's really well done.
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bitteryetsweet Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014
You were trying to be positive in this? I can appreciate the effort. I'm up for fresh, new perspectives towards the things we've already known to enlighten myself, and it's kind of rewarding. And it's applicable, so there's a bonus.

All of that said, I wish you clarified the meaning of this whole deviation first thing before posting it. And you getting a Daily Deviation because of this isn't about you deserving it; everyone else here appreciates your effort to be positive too. I just wanted to let you know that, and we're very grateful to have you here.

We hope to see you soon!Hi! 
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"Don't let her think about the scars
     that no one but her can see. If she 
     says "I think I'm broken" smile like you
     know a secret and say, "No, you're mending."
     But do not be the one to fix her - no, she
     must be the one to do it herself, and you
     merely are there to quietly encourage her."

Amen...   No one should "fix" anyone. But It's also not "your" job to better yourself - "yourself" That's God's job. and Until you submit to Him through His Son, you are just living a life of hopeless dreams that will never happen.

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Read her poetry (even if you are
     not a poet), the kind that uses
     flowery words and compares girls to
     the moon; the kind that you will
     rewrite for her. Make her a warrior.
     Make her a goddess with eyes like a
     wolf's and a smile like a tiger's."

Again...   If you want someone to "worship" you, and you believe you may find them one day, you are simply putting yourself in a bad triangulation dynamic where you are looking for a "rescuer" Bad Guy seeks Victim seeks Rescuer seeks Bad Guy....  If you want to live a life that's worth something and understand what "Love" is you need to understand the Root of where it comes from and who designed it. Not to mention understand that if you place anything on an equal or higher tier than the Love you have for your Creator, you are doomed to fail in your relationships.

Every Time.

Read Danny Silk's "Keep Your Love On" and you will understand the nature of what I speak and WHY Jesus loves you more.....

More than anyone in your life.

and when you come to understand this, you will find someone who is the same. :)
and you will be at peace. 
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vonsilvo Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
Such beauty, such truth.
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AintGotNoLegs Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
There are too many of us women having too many bad days. We were born with a sadness inside us that never goes away. What you wrote is beautiful, touching, and relatable. Thank you for it. It is something that not only I, but anyone else who needs it, can read and know they aren't alone. 
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NSAlchemist Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
LOLOLOL I'm sorry I loved this I was sitting here, like that was beautiful.

And then I saw the description and you like killed the mood. That was hilarious,  "Oh shit why did this get a DD I didn't want this to be that popular it's not even that good I mean I'm flattered but oh fuck I don't deserve it." This was one of my favorite parts "
EDIT: Front page?! Get this off it doesn't belong there." This was the second one- I can't stop laughing at the reaction.

Beautiful poem, and I hope things are better off in the comments for you don't deserve that :aww:
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NoLoveAvailable Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014
I started crying at number two. If there was an unlimited amount of how many times you could fav it, I would do it 100 times everyday for the rest of my life
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