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she wishes for a heart of ice

a heart to hide her fears

she wishes for a heart of ice

a heart to freeze her tears




but if her heart of ice meets fire

then perhaps it will thaw

for if her heart of ice meets fire

she will surely pour out her emotions raw
I don't know where this one came from.

I guess it's from the point of view of an original character I created long ago, that I will never use.

She just wanted to hide her heart away, but if she meets him, that all will change.

Maybe I'll make it into an actual story someday. Who knows.

AND LOOK I MADE IT RHYME. I'M SO PROUD OF MYSELF.
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LupiniunStar Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013
Ahh, so very very good. I wish that I could just keep my heart hard, but I cry so easily. And this sounds like a good, basic premise for the romantic plot line in a story. Even if you don't plan to use that character, you might be able to do something like this!

(Also, good job with the rhyming! c:)
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worldpeaceismine Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
See! You are an AMAZING writer!!!!!
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GuardianOfTheElement Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
After reading this last night it inspired me to write three poems of my own. Sad part is I wrote them all under ten minutes. I really like this. It's beautiful.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It doesn't matter how long or short it takes you to write things. As long as you write them from the heart.

But thank you.
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GuardianOfTheElement Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome.
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dbstrickland1962 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
So much depth and emotion, that is what poetry is, all I can say "my hat is off to a great piece". I would not change a word, because it is you and touches each individual in a unique way. Thanks for sharing.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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DenimPanda Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
It's really beautiful,sometimes I wish I had a heart of ice,so life wouldn't be so...difficult
...Even though I'm just 15 and I know my problems are stupid
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry. I'm sixteen and I share the same thoughts.
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The second verse oddly reminds me of a romance fanfic I read somewhere a while ago; the main character (female) hides behind an expressionless mask (mentally, not physically) to shield herself from the world and when she meets a special man, he effortlessly takes away her mask and teaches her to control her emotions. Now, I'm not comparing you, but simply saying that this poem reminds me that things can sometimes happen.
YOU MADE IT RHYME! LOOK AT IT PEOPLES!
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