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personally,
i can’t see myself with
the milky way embedded in my
bones, much less my heart. it
sure would be nice to wish upon a
star for our happy ending, but i think
my prince charming just
sees through
me.

i am a phantom
with wanderlust
stitched into my
lips and rose petals
inked into my skin.

these galaxy-fearing
bones would like to
whisper “i love you”
in every language of
the world,
because fate may
not exist and it’s
high time i form
my own destiny.
A poem from my secret series, one that turned out halfway decent and I really liked how it came out. So I'm sharing it on here. I made a positive poem for once guys! Woohoo for me!

The secret: "I hope love doesn’t need fate or destiny, or else I’m screwed, and he’ll never notice."

More secrets here: midnightcrocuses.tumblr.com/

Main blog here: frostbitten-irises.tumblr.com/
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
%PoeticalCondition critique

That last stanza was the best damn thing I've ever read. In all honesty, it was the most sincere and honest part of this whole poem.

I love the font chosen, and the concreteness of each stanza made it worthwhile in reading. I love the ambience in each and every single proceeding.

I found nothing to particularly pinpoint and fix in this poem. I honestly loved it as is. Well written.
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Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013
Hello! :wave: I've used your title here: pauper-circumstance.deviantart… All the credit goes to you. If you have any problem with my use of your title, let me know and I will take it down if you want me to. Thank you! :)
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fox-ninja97 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student Writer
This made me think of a story I read recently (Faberry fanfiction, what can ya do?). I think there's fates that we're born to and fates that we make through sheer force of will. I like to think that love is one that we create :)

I really liked this, by the way. The imagery is beautiful and touches that part of my heart that'll have me sighing for half the night over it.
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akkajess Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Writer
Hi!
Your amazing work has been featured here: akkajess.deviantart.com/journa…
:heart:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this. I mean, REALLY like this. :heart:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear so!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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chancerox Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
gahh. that secret is just like me what can i have a pickle please. 
breathtaking work as usual. 
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!

my friends call me Princess Anti-Pickle because I hate them so much lol
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chancerox Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
.. that is flawless 
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