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At one point in your life,
you didn't mind being a girl.

It was only after you met
her that you thought, "Maybe
this isn't the right fit." Because,
if you're being honest, she
deserves a knight in shining armor.

You are not Atlas, my dear.

Your shoulders do not
merit a world of troubles,
but instead love-lined clouds
that whisper, "Do not be
ashamed of who you are."

A woman can be a
champion whose heart burns
with more gold than a king's
castle holds. Perhaps if
you had more faith,
you might find that's just what
she needs.
A poem from my secret series, which I finally got around to writing again. I really like this one. It turned out positive, which is good, and I just got all fuzzy from it. I hope the secret holder sees this and I also hope that others in this position can figure things out. I'm rooting for you guys, okay? :)

The secret: "I hope she finds someone who thinks the world of her the way I do…just in guy form. She deserves that."

More secrets here: midnightcrocuses.tumblr.com/

Main blog here: frostbitten-irises.tumblr.com/
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LilyHellsing Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
Baaaw! Gah, this is amazingly sweet.
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BunnyFitzgerald Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
So sweet, I hope she finds this too. It's sure to make her month :)
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TwistedWillows Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
Beautifully written and a message well-said. :3
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StrikeTheMadness Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Professional Writer

I wanted to let you know that I used this poems title as a part of a title poem I recently wrote and posted on here. I of course gave you credit and provided a link to your poem on the poems page in hopes to help spread your work. Feel free to check out the poem here: strikethemadness.deviantart.co…

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kittykatrocks12 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!
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ManiacTenshi Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful and positive. We need more of this.
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projectofir Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Professional Writer
I know the poem writer's intentions are well, but I would find this offensive if I was the receiver. Feelings, especially love, are always a battleground for two people to fit in, and no more. Writer seems to assume it's alright to chime in and assume things out of someone else's head.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi! I'm the receiver :)

I totally respect the way you would feel, because those are your feelings and you have every right to them. But I'd like to reiterate that I did really like this. I'm still riding the high it gave me. Also, the way the secret series works is you come to a writer with your secret and they make a poem out of it. So she's not intruding, I came to her and let her in.

*rolls away*
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It all depends how you interpret it. The secret holder personally approached me saying she couldn't have been happier with the poem because of the confidence it gave her.
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projectofir Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Professional Writer
Yes, interpretations vary as in all art. And that's the way it should be. However, my opinion being said, I salute you for taking a stand on this hard subject. And if I, for some brainfarting reason, have missed the political message in this and it indeed holds one - then, then I might swallow my tongue and join the cheering people.
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