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you are
only human.

There is no such
thing as stardust
floating in your veins or
gloomy poetry stitched
right into your heart.

Your blood is made of
iron - unbreakable,
unbending and unmatched
by any other stronghold,
for you are a fortress
that they will never invade.

Stand up,
darling;
wipe those tears away
and know that
you are the only one
who can reinforce these walls.
I've been having too many bad days in a row lately so basically this is just me trying to tell myself to buck up and keep on moving.


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Nutcase9 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Student General Artist
Nobody's perfect, that's reality ;)
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Good-Luck-Penny Featured By Owner May 16, 2014
This poem is still as powerful as the first time I read it and it knocked the wind out of me.
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LilyHellsing Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
I dig it...very nice.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"Your blood is made of
iron - unbreakable,
unbending and unmatched
by any other stronghold,
for you are a fortress
that they will never invade."

Love that. :heart:
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love that even as you say "don't be silly, you're just a person, get a dose of reality" you're still using very striking imagery and a bit of idealism through your blood of iron metaphor. It really makes a great contrast and I feel like it suggests that idealism isn't always a bad thing as it holds so much hope and encouragement, but that we should reign it in every once in a while and be sure we aren't kidding ourselves.
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Zireael07 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the your blood is made of iron line. Brilliant!
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TheAstronomicon Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Only the iron in your blood comes from the heart of a star that died to bring it into creation.
So, you are indeed, made of star-stuff as Sagan put it.
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Piezelle Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist
I'm gonna have to print this out if this is okay with you
I just need to read this every time I suddenly feel stressed or upset during class.
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Tatopie Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It was absolutely beautiful until and even still during really the last stanza. Really liked it, but a piece of constructive criticism if you'd like it:
Your last stanza has a message but two thirds of the lines in it feel like fluff.  If you could expand that message of strengthening one's self while cutting out the filler-y lines, that would work, or if you could weave the message of self-reliance into the other two stanzas and do away with the third altogether, that would also work. Vague suggestions, I know, but when it comes to critiquing poetry specificity is rarely a good thing.

In any case, I wouldn't bother critiquing of I didn't think it was worth it, so I obviously quite liked it!
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HazyDreamerNeko Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
I needed this. 
Well, I hope your days are better now otherwise good luck to you and to me ^^"
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) glad to hear it helped.
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KawaiiKoneko97 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Student Filmographer
This is a very lovely poem. <3 Very nice, I love it. ^^
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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KawaiiKoneko97 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Student Filmographer
You're very welcome. <3
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SeriesArtiststarter Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Woah, here I thought this was going to saying how fragile humans are, but this certainly is different from what I expected for it's full of a truthful spark of hope in every word.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I feel like I've exhausted all the dark topics so might as well start focusing on the good ones.
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SeriesArtiststarter Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Trust me when I say this, there is more in bad then there is in good but the ones within good are quite well numbered. Heh heh.
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Zefreonnoerfez Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
Thank you for these moving words, I'm inspired by them.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear that <3
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AnthropomorPhillie Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
This is very useful.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear that!
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EchosBlade Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Love is just a chemical. We choose to give it meaning.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This isn't about love. It's more about self-acceptance.
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconclapplz: I was having a bad morning.

This really helps. Thanks, hun.:iconhuggleplz:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
bad days are poo.
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searchub Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
That's great! There is no such thing as stardust!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, there really is, but there's no such thing as sparkly blood. Aha. 
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LPeebles Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
About the stardust line... it's not quite accurate. See, hydrogen, helium, and trace amounts of lithium were created in the Big Bang, whereas other elements were so heavy that only the explosion of a star could fuse them together, and some even heavier elements could only be created once a supernova occurred and forced atoms to fuse. So technically we all are made of stars, or the remaining atoms of them that were shoved together at least.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
pst I was going for it in a more romantic sense because science is hard to write into poetry for me
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LPeebles Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Good point. I just happen to be a bit of an amateur astronomer(I chart stars and whatnot every night) and so things like that are prevalent among my thoughts.
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EdgeOfDestruction Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
*coughing mist* yeour to talk!

Awesome prose! my heart is glass though!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! <3
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is wonderful <3
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome <3
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smallsincerities Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is fantastic. I needed this. Let me hug you please. :)
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like hugs. Hugs are nice. Hugs.
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smallsincerities Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Agreed.
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Orec12 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I feel you there :( My bad days are increasing. It's like the harder I try to pull myself together the more I break apart :(

Good work on this though; I like it :)
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yep, that's literally me. But I keep trying. You keep on trying, too.
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TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
You hang in there, ya hear?
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
-insert cheesy monkey picture here-
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TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
Replies with "TOTALLY UN-AMUSED NIGERIAN AARDVARK" SANDWICH.
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
DAMN this shit is good. Another hit please! 
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, maybe when my muse returns!
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
Haha that's how I am, I have my muses too. xD
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Ag-Wolf Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
This is really cool. AND rad. It's just the right amount of romanticization to be inspiring, but not overbearing or cheesy. Good job. :clap:
Also it reminds me of that thing from Bioshock, "No Gods or Kings. Only Man." I don't think that's what you were going for, but still. :3
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I FUCKIN LOVE BIOSHOCK

well, Infinite. Elizabeth is my bby.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
Shared this on facebook. Lovely.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
KATHRYN WHY IT'S NOT WORTHY
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