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you are
only human.

There is no such
thing as stardust
floating in your veins or
gloomy poetry stitched
right into your heart.

Your blood is made of
iron - unbreakable,
unbending and unmatched
by any other stronghold,
for you are a fortress
that they will never invade.

Stand up,
darling;
wipe those tears away
and know that
you are the only one
who can reinforce these walls.
I've been having too many bad days in a row lately so basically this is just me trying to tell myself to buck up and keep on moving.


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Nutcase9 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Student General Artist
Nobody's perfect, that's reality ;)
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Good-Luck-Penny Featured By Owner May 16, 2014
This poem is still as powerful as the first time I read it and it knocked the wind out of me.
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LilyHellsing Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
I dig it...very nice.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"Your blood is made of
iron - unbreakable,
unbending and unmatched
by any other stronghold,
for you are a fortress
that they will never invade."

Love that. :heart:
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love that even as you say "don't be silly, you're just a person, get a dose of reality" you're still using very striking imagery and a bit of idealism through your blood of iron metaphor. It really makes a great contrast and I feel like it suggests that idealism isn't always a bad thing as it holds so much hope and encouragement, but that we should reign it in every once in a while and be sure we aren't kidding ourselves.
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Zireael07 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the your blood is made of iron line. Brilliant!
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TheAstronomicon Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Only the iron in your blood comes from the heart of a star that died to bring it into creation.
So, you are indeed, made of star-stuff as Sagan put it.
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Piezelle Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist
I'm gonna have to print this out if this is okay with you
I just need to read this every time I suddenly feel stressed or upset during class.
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Tatopie Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It was absolutely beautiful until and even still during really the last stanza. Really liked it, but a piece of constructive criticism if you'd like it:
Your last stanza has a message but two thirds of the lines in it feel like fluff.  If you could expand that message of strengthening one's self while cutting out the filler-y lines, that would work, or if you could weave the message of self-reliance into the other two stanzas and do away with the third altogether, that would also work. Vague suggestions, I know, but when it comes to critiquing poetry specificity is rarely a good thing.

In any case, I wouldn't bother critiquing of I didn't think it was worth it, so I obviously quite liked it!
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HazyDreamerNeko Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
I needed this. 
Well, I hope your days are better now otherwise good luck to you and to me ^^"
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