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Sometimes I like to pretend,
I'm like the Mariana Trench with my words.

That my fingers construct such eloquence,
as abyssal and profound as the Grand Canyon.

Yet the truth of the matter is that,
my heart has not been pulverized into dust.

I am about as succint and poignant,
as a rusted bucket.
I don't think people read my works and have to catch their breath after they're finished like I do with certain people's writings on here. I don't have the depth and sentiment I try to pretend I do. I've not been through a life of heartbreaks, really. Of course I've had my ups and downs (especially currently), but...

I'm just pretending I know what human emotions truly are, and I'm desperate to fully understand them at last and stop the masquerade I create with my words.

This is mostly just my musings. I have writer's block right now, so I tried getting something down to help it along. It didn't exactly work as I had planned, but what can you do?
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I don't agree with this poem, but it's a great poem. With some of your poems, I really do have to take a moment after because they're just so good. I also liked the set up of this poem, with the larger and smaller words. 
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yellowfire7 Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"I am about as succinct and poignant,
as a rusted bucket."

I liked how you put that succinctly and poignantly. :la:

Human emotions are those which people experience every day. The emotions people feel after a tragic event, a heartbreak, or something similar are certainly just as human and very powerful, but they are not representative. That you have not experienced certain situations does not make you any less capable of expressing profound thought and powerful emotion. The proof of the pudding is in the eating, and the proof of your words is in the reading. You did not happen on these words by accident.
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CardinalDesertFox Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh writer's block, how we abhor thee. Still, I love what you're saying here, because I feel that a lot of writers struggle with this. We want to touch something deeper in our readers, we want to move them, but sometimes we haven't experienced what it is we're writing. Though I do think you do far better than any rusted bucked I've ever seen! :)
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PrussianPersephone Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. But...I just want to be deeper. I dunno. Like, works by *DearPoetry? I wish I had some semblance of her talent.
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CardinalDesertFox Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
She is very, very talented. But I'm sure when she first started writing poetry it wasn't quite so deep. You'll get there, Bridget, just keep writing. :)
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Awesome as always. But I disagree. You don't have to suffer horribly to produce beautiful art. And you definitely don't have to suffer to feel real human emotion.
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PrussianPersephone Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I guess I've been in the depressing part of the literature section too much, then. :|
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autumn--thunder Dec 16, 2012  Student General Artist
I always love reading your poems. I really, really do. In all honesty, I kinda get hyped when I see one in my inbox. xD
We can't all expect to be those sort of people where they just have that gift to keep you on the edge of your seat. Because heck, I'm not. But you... you do have depth in your writing and that way of making people want to read more and more. I'm actually reading World is Ours at the moment. It's freaking addictive.

Good luck with your writer's block. It's a nasty thing.
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PrussianPersephone Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really? Wow. Well. Thank you. Thank you so much.

I miss WIO...I need to go back and edit it...
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autumn--thunder Dec 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Yep, really. ^^ You're very welcome, really. It's the truth.

I love the story. It's so original, and America is hilarious. XD
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